Kia ora This is blog post about a short film called Umbrella This is the Goal: use a range of written features to engage the audience, use simple and compound sentences with a variety of beginnings, lengths and structures, use some complex sentences to create pace, flow and interest & ensure that most writing is grammatically correct.. I hope you like it.
Umbrella
Just before darkness fell from the night sky, The door to Miss Elem’s Home For Children opened wide. The girl with the neon yellow umbrella, nervously entered the orphanage before finding a place for the yellow umbrella. Not wanting to be seen Boris quickly peered his head around the door frame so that he was hidden from view. Standing off to the side the girl observed the glorious scene while the children searched in the box for loving treasures. The girl smiled while she was watching the young boy flying around the room like a very fast race car. Her smile quickly disintegrated as she looked back at the umbrella stand and all she saw were little tiny puddles. Her dearest admiring umbrella had been snatched!
Could you find the simile in my writing?
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