The amazing justice.
In the city in New York there were two superheroes called Super Incredible and Super Maxi miss. They fight crime everywhere, in the sea, in the desert, even underground. They are the bravest superheroes in New York but they heard the crime bell ringing brouhaha. I've hey heard that laugh before its Dr Mel!!! He stole the biggest diamond but how did he get out of the most sincere prison he probably used his bombs and let the prisoners go that's why there's so many people running around. Now where's Dr Mel? Oh there he is! Let's go and catch him…. oh no!! It's getting dark I guess we have to get him in the dark oh well meanwhile yes I got the biggest diamond in the world stop right there no well to bad. Can I please not go to jail again but your stealing the biggest diamond in the world. Pow!! Bang!! Wham!! Ouch I guess he's going to hospital jail but super Incredible about the prisoners said super Maxi miss I got this. Pow!! Our man I was going to steal some money from the bank. See wow nice. Well see you guys later. Wait are you stopping the…. bye, bye
Hi Alex, Love this action packed story. I love how you used onomatopoeia to bring it to life for your reader. I think we need to look at adding speech mark for dialogue. Well done and thanks for sharing.
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